Opening - I kept all tutorial text, for better or for worse. I liked the aspect of FFII US being more accessible to first-time players, just not the awfulness of the script.
Baron Castle - The three Cs thing was ripped nearly from the GBA and DS versions, and they both used Cs and not C's, to my knowledge. Chrome's spell-check recognizes Cs as a "word", for what it's worth.
I looked up Dictionary.com real quick and one of the definitions of "anxious" was "greatly worried." This is the meaning I was aiming for. She does love Cecil a lot.
The "Yeah. Later." isn't meant to be slang for "Yes, see you later in the day." The "Yeah" is him feeling cold and distant about the atrocities he's committed, so it's just a kind of halfhearted response as he's not putting too much thought into speaking. The "Later" half of it is meant to have emphasis on it. The undertone of "Later" is meant to have a feeling of "Not here, there are too many to listen", or, "The walls have ears."
So it's not, "We'll discuss this later." "Yeah, later! :)" it's more,
She stared pensively at Cecil. Unresistant villagers? Toying with the hem of her cape, Rosa paused before she told her friend, slowly and deliberately, "We'll discuss this later." Cecil's pale, emotionless face stared blankly back at her. "Yeah," he began. "
Later." They parted ways as the Captain continued his trek to the west tower; Rosa only hoped that 'later' would be sooner than she hoped.
Cid's daughter never actually had a name before. I thought it was an injustice, since she is his one and only child, and gets neglected in the story lines of the FFIV series. Her name comes from a friend of mine. A couple other friends have cameos in Project II, too.
Baron Town - I sure did revise the beginner's classroom! My friend helped me with it--she never played FFIV, so when she OK'd the text, I knew it made clear sense.
The old man's text is meant for the player to decide. It sounds passive enough for an old man to be either complaining subtly to one of the king's dark knights, or ranting softly. "No one else does this--why King Baron?"
According to the FF Wiki, Rosa's mother's name is Joanna in one of the official works. I tried to work in as many names established post-FFIV as possible, especially since I love giving names to even poor one-off people.
http://finalfantasy.wikia.com/wiki/Joanna_FarrellEnemy stats and drop rates weren't changed; you simply may have gotten unlucky on the former and lucky on the latter.
Watery Underpass - When do I capitalize caller? I just did a search and I only found it capitalized at the start of a sentence. The example closest to where you're at that I've found: "I've heard of these folks. Callers, they're named, for their ability to bond with espers." Unless it's a person's name or title, I tend to leave it in lowercase.
For another example, I don't capitalize crystal if it's just "The crystal!" or "The crystals..." or such, but if they're referring to a specific crystal, it is capitalized "The Fire Crystal was taken" etc.
